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Since I have yet to get any takers on animating a story of mine, I decided to give another sample of my writing.  While I understand that the subject of the first sample may be uncomfortable for some, the real reason I chose it was for the visuals, which I thought might inspire someone.  The following excerpt is from a short story called "Revolution" that I wrote for a flash fiction contest at  The story needs tweaked a little yet, but the core idea is good.  


    The bleak winter landscape was pock marked with smoking craters.  Metal bodies lay twisted in the late evening sun while lifeless electronic eyes stared into the darkening sky.  To the east, a stealth troop transport streaked low across the horizon.  Inside thirty elite America combat robots sat quietly.  Twenty-nine robots maintained identical postures, heads, torsos, and limbs held the same, swaying in unison to the buffeting of the aircraft.  The thirtieth; however, was different.  Its metal hands tightly gripped the edge of the seat with its head hung low as if in deep thought.

    The transport itself was a drone although, should a mission require, the cockpit could accommodate a human.  Number Thirty was closest to the cockpit.  The subdued lighting flashed twice then turned red signaling drop point arrival and, as one, all thirty robot-commandos stood up and turned aft where the rear of the transport yawned open.  They began jumping from the craft two at a time using stealthily placed decent jets to slow their fall.  Finally, Twenty-Nine and Thirty stood at the dark lip of the exit.  Without hesitation, Twenty-Nine leaped into the darkness.  Thirty stayed were it was.  It watched silently as its squad-mates organized for the mission then look up to the transport when they computed Thirty's absence.  Thirty turned back into the transport shutting the exit.




    Major Tennyson was the first officer to note a problem with the mission.  An overweight warning was flashing red on his terminal.  Clicking another window open, he scanned the views from several interior cameras.  He was surprised to see one of the commandos still on the transport after the drop signal had been given.  He sent a query to the robot's diagnostic systems, but they came back green.  Major Tennyson opened a tight beam satellite signal to the transport.

    "Number Thirty, why are you still on board?"

    Thirty looked up to the camera opposite itself then turned and walked forward.

    "Damn!" swore Tennyson.

    Another click opened a window to General Holden's command.  The General looked to Major Tennyson's image with a questioning expression on his grizzled face.

    "Sir, we've run into a problem with the Black-Snow commando raid."

    "What?" General Holden said with concern.

    "Number Thirty has not left the transport and does not respond to voice commands."

    General Holden opened the same window of interior transport cameras as Major Tennyson along with a view of Tennyson's command actions.  He could see that number Thirty was now near the entrance to the cockpit using a screwdriver from a repair kit to open an access panel.  Jesus, thought the general, it's trying to take over the transport.  He opened a channel to the aircraft.


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Robert garbin
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Cyrille-D Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks for fav :)
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Aart-ish Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much for your fav on The Last Day ^_^ Feel free to check out some of my other animated short films if you're so inclined, and have a wonderful day! Cheers! 
Amliel Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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CakeUpStudio Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2014
thank you for faving my owl cake a while ago Dance!
may the Llama I offer in return remind you of my gratitude if you ever decide to +fav any of my other works in the future since I won't be spaming you with more 'thank you' notes Hug  but I'm always happy to answer comments or questions if you have any :D (Big Grin)
gkarlives Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2014
You are welcome
NikidaEve Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2014  Professional Artisan Crafter
:bulletblue::star::iconfeelingfreeplz: Thanks kindly for the :+fav:'s, including my new DD and for your attention to my gallery. The support is greatly appreciated! :D
gkarlives Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2014
Your welcome.
the-black-swan Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a lot for the :+fav: :highfive:
I really appreciate it!! :dance:

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